Archive other online sources with webcitation.org. You can use this page (step-by-step instructions there) to manually archive all online references which will guarantee they remain accessible even if the site goes down. After this has been resolved, I would be happy to support! SoapFan12 22:52, 17 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All done and thank you very much for the review :) – Underneath-it-All (talk) 00:48, 18 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• In the lead's second paragraph, remove the initials (BPI) after the British Phonographic Industry since it's not mentioned elsewhere anymore.
• The lead only mentions that only one single from her managed to chart aside from the UK. It would be great if you put some info about some her singles that managed to chart internationally, e.g. "Sophia" also charted in Sweden.
• In the Dear Frustrated Superstar album details, Released 20 August 2001 (UK) --> Released: 20 August 2001. You forgot to put a colon (:) in the release date. And since its the earliest release date already, there's no much need to put (UK) in it.
• Didn't "Everybody's Gone to War" also charted in the two Belgian regions even though in the tip charts? It would also be nice if you include them in the peak chart positions since the 10-territory limit hasn't been reached yet. (It's important to remember that the Ultratop and the Ultratip charts are different from each other, so you need to add 50 positions + its Flemish position [e.g. 50 + 10, so 60] and 40 positions + its Walloon position [e.g. 40 + 17, so 57] and put a footnote that "Everybody's Gone to War" peaked at number 10 and 17 on the Ultratip Flemish and Walloon charts, which acts as an extension to the Ultratop 50 and Ultratop 40.)
• FN9, FN10, FN13, FN14, FN15, FN20, FN21, FN22, FN23, FN24, FN37, FN42: You only need to link the first time, per WP:OVERLINK. So you need to unlink Itunes and Apple since the two are already linked in FN8.
• FN11, FN18, FN19: Unlink AllMusic and Rovi Corporation.
• FN38, FN39: Unlink MTV Base and Viacom Media Networks.
• Unlink UK in peak positions in the "As a featured artist" table.
• "Everybody's Gone to War" also charted on the Dutch Top 40 Tipparade. You could also include that. (Reminder: the Dutch Top 40 Tipparade is also different from the Dutch Top 40, so you need to add 40 positions + its Tipparade position and put a footnote that "Everybody's Gone to War" peaked at number 10 on the Dutch Top 40 Tipparade, which acts as an extension to the the main Dutch Top 40 chart.)

Chihciboy (talk) 04:19, 25 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! I have added the Belgian charts, removed the many wikilinks, added extra chart info to the lead and removed (BPI). I however did leave the (UK) for Dear Frustrated Superstar for uniformity. – Underneath-it-All (talk) 17:03, 25 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• It's a great list with well-archived references... but I'm kind of having some issues (especially on the lead). There is this Guardian article about her disowning Dear Frustrated Superstar when the album sold two copies in its first week and about her setting up Idaho Records to release Fires and reissue Dear Frustrated Superstar with Warner Music. It's kind of a big deal because its her own label which is part of a discography.
• The words "reached" and "peaked" are written more than once. Try other words for variety (e.g. charted, debuted [if it entered the chart in its peak position])
• Does she have total sales figures, at least in the UK? You could add that in the lead. Music Week has sales of Dear Frustrated Superstar, and The Guardian has worldwide and UK sales of Fires. You could put it in the albums table next to certifications (see WP:DISCOGSTYLE)
• In singles section, you can remove "as a main artist" since she's not a member of a musical duo/group, right? People might think she is.

• Also in the lead, while it isn't required, you could change United Kingdom ---> UK Albums Chart/UK Singles Chart so it wont appear that the country itself is linked. (e.g. It reached number 98 in the United Kingdom --> It charted at number 98 in the UK Albums Chart, which reached number 54 in the UK --> which reached number 54 in the UK Singles Chart)

Chihciboy (talk) 14:49, 26 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I have made some further changes and used your suggestions in the lead. I have left the "as a main artist" in the singles section because it has been used in previous discography FL's that I have written and by others (see Cœur de pirate discography + Rihanna discography). Also, I can't find a reliable ref. for "Everybody's Gone to War" charting on the Dutch Top 40 Tipparade. – Underneath-it-All (talk) 19:22, 26 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Here's "Everbody's Gone to War"'s chart data from the Dutch Top 40 site, you can use this. Another note, I kind of noticed that the words "the album" were repeated loads of times in every album cycle. Try restructuring it (e.g. The album peaked at number 31 in the UK and and produced three singles... ---> It entered the UK Albums Chart at number 31 and issued three singles.) Chihciboy (talk) 07:29, 27 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Added the Dutch chart (thank you for the link) and mixed the wording up a bit in the lead. Hopefully now it doesn't sound so repetitive. – Underneath-it-All (talk) 14:43, 27 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• "14 singles" fourteen to keep all comparable items in a single sentence in a similar format, per MOSNUM?
• "and 11 music" -> eleven.
• "number 54 in the UK and number two " -> 2.
• " her second studio..." "Pallot's second..."
• Put (BPI) after British Phonographic Industry.
• Shouldn't "Album details" be "EP details" in the EP table?

The Rambling Man (talk) 12:14, 30 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done and thank you – Underneath-it-All (talk) 21:45, 30 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]