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Talk:Slumber Party (song)

Rip Off Shakira

This video appears to be a combination of Eyes Wide Shut and Shakira's Video for Can't Remember to Forget You. Much is said about Britney's alleged creativity, and yet we have no solid evidence that any ideas actually come from Britney herself as-is, rather than her asking for something corny or offering up her diary for a team to create something for her. It would appear that much of Britney's ideas through the years have simply been a recombining of other people's ideas. For example, we also saw this in Radar which was stolen from the Polo Match from Pretty Woman. It appears that Britney the movie buff doesn't really have ideas, she just remembers things she likes and then has her team recreate them for her. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2601:14B:4401:D5C0:A845:8A70:47AB:48F3 (talk) 07:21, 26 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Wikipedia is N O T a forum; sadly. If u wanna cry about something, Reddit's the place to go. xD. Є𐌔ⲘО𐌔𐍄 𐍄𐌀ℓК 11:14, 26 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Perfect response lol Aoba47 (talk) 21:36, 12 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Way late, but that was a good comeback hahaha. — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 03:05, 24 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Removal of remix version

A month ago, I edited this article to mention the removal of all 2016 editions of Glory from streaming services, causing the remix version of "Slumber Party" with Tinashe to also be gone. I added a Spotify link as a source in the next edit minutes later. My contribution was removed three days ago along with some of the article being rewritten. Should it be added back or is there a reason why it's not included in the article?

Because IP addresses change every few weeks, I'm not using the same one as I did to edit this article a month ago. 90.242.59.44 (talk) 13:23, 10 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

Passed. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 13:50, 11 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Averageuntitleduser (talk · contribs) 03:27, 2 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

That synth is absurdly catchy; I'm excited to give this a review! My comments should be done by Sunday. Feel free to discuss them if you disagree.

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Well-written

The article reads nicely, I have a handful of comments though. For the record, I did a fairly large copyedit, as well as some adjustments to the "Hotline Bling" sentence and the last paragraphs of the "Recording and composition" and music video "Reception" sections. I also adjusted some links.

  • The article should be consistent with its usage of release dates in parentheses. If you stick with them, a sentence or two might be disrupted, but there are workarounds.
  • featuring vocals from American singer Tinashe in a remix version. It was sent to US contemporary hit radio on November 22, 2016. — to clarify that the remix version was sent to radio, combine these phrases into their own sentence
  • Lyrically, the song is defined as — perhaps, "was described as"
  • where Spears uses double entendre, while evoking one-night stands, the ritual of sleepovers with friends and the teenage game of seven minutes in heaven. — I don't know how to make this work with the previous phrase, so I'd split it off into its own sentence
  • placed emphasis on — "emphasized"
  • It also later appeared in Just Dance 2018. — I'm not sure how to incorporate this into the article, but since it's probably not the most essential, you could remove it.
  • several polls for different magazines to ask — perhaps, "several polls to different magazines asking"
  • For clarity, is it worth mentioning that the original version was released as part of the album before the remix version was released?
  • it's definitely a song you wanna take you and your girlfriends go out and just have a great time — I did a double take when I read this. I don't want to make too many modifications, but I feel like it's in order. Perhaps: "It's definitely a song you [listen to when] you and your girlfriends go out and just have a great time".
  • composition details — "details" feels a bit odd, I would remove it
  • three minutes and thirty-four seconds (3:34) — is the length in brackets necessary? Although, if it's been done on other articles, then fair game.
  • "cooing backing vocals" and percussion — this sort of implies that the percussion was cooing. Did any other source give a musical description of the percussion?
  • For Alex Macpherson of The Guardian, the song "is reminiscent of Spears's 2003 album, In the Zone." — in what ways?
  • Consider reinforcing the first "Reception" section into two paragraphs about the opinions towards its composition and sexuality. Or at least join the two sentences that are critical of the latter.
  • said that the song "serves its purpose quite well", calling it "another danceable song." — "the song" becomes repetitive, so I would leave it at "dancable"
  • "Slumber Party" debuted at number 157 following the release of Glory, and climbed to number 121 a week later. — of what chart?
  • "purpley-blue room" — "purplish-blue" (without quotation marks)
  • For Zac Johnson of E! News, "Not since 'Boys' has Britney made walking through party look like art", and also praised the chemistry between Spears and Tinashe — these phrases don't mesh together, consider splitting them.
  • I didn't realize that the Slant Magazine review was mixed until I read it. I would make this a bitclearer.
  • Consider adding a "Version" column to the "Release history" table, where you include the original, the remix version, and the remix EP.

Verifiable with no original research

Almost all sources are reliable and no major issues with their formatting. Though, a handful of them were dead, so I used the "fix dead links" tool. Still, I have a few comments.

  • The "House Of Blues Studio" in the infobox needs a citation
  • where Spears uses double entendre — can't find in the article
  • The video also features Spears' ex-husband Sam Asghari. — their divorce is not mentioned in the article, but this Today piece mentions his role retrospectively.
  • A music video directed by Colin Tilley was shot on October 25, 2016, — I would leave this at "October 2016". I would remove the specific date in the article as well. Spears's photo might not have been posted the day of the shoot, or the shoot could've lasted many days.
  • I would remove the Headline Planet source. I'm not convinced of its reliability and one of the phrases is not supported by it.
  • The Fox News source is syndicated from an ET Online source, cite it instead.
  • I'm not sure of PopCrush's reliability, but in its first use, it's fine as a primary source. For the Triple Ho sentence, though, it fails verification. I tried peeking around KMVQ's website, but couldn't find much; the sentence might have to be removed.

Spot-check

Broad in its coverage

All sections seem nearly comprehensive. No glaring issues on this front.

Neutral

No blatant promotion; quotes and statements are differentiated. In fact, quotes are used quite liberally, but they are all attributed.

Stable

No recent edit wars or content disputes.

Illustrated

Sufficiently illustrated, if not comprehensively. Fair use licences are satisfactory and the images improve the reader's understanding.

Summary

On first impression, the article looks very tidy! I think only a few more fixes are needed.

I'll be putting this on hold for now. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 15:49, 8 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
As @11JORN: seems to be busy with college for the forseeable future, I've taken the liberty of adressing these minor comments; I suppose this means another article promoted! Averageuntitleduser (talk) 13:49, 11 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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