Langbahn Team – Weltmeisterschaft

Talk:Arctic resources race

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I’m not informed enough about the subject to offer commentary beyond that it all seems very well formatted to me, but I can’t help noticing that the “Tourism” subheading is currently empty; is it awaiting a forthcoming edit to add information, was it accidentally deleted, or should the Tourism subheading be deleted as well? Just thought I’d bring it up instead of removing the subheading myself. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Milo Alighieri (talk • contribs) 11:39, 27 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback from Garrison

• Excellent job so far! Very coherent structure, neutral writing style, and comprehensive content. Good job with linking and citations. I like the map you have provided and think the article could benefit from more visual content.

• Additional editing needed for grammatical errors, such as extra comma in “Greenland Sea, Barents, Sea, Kara Sea…” and in “Another plentiful resource is the arctic is located underwater; fish” should be a colon, not a semicolon.

• I would be interested in learning more about how China and other nations are trying to get involved, add more info here if you can.

• The Climate Refugees section needs some work, there are no citations and it needs to be copy edited.

• Please add categories to your article.

• Good job linking to other articles but try to add more links to from other articles to yours. — Preceding unsigned comment added by California1990 (talk • contribs) 01:44, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback from Prof. Gelobter

Really nicely structured and documented. Remember however that your grade depends also on the extent to which you cover EJ in the article. I think you can accomplish this by focusing more on arctic communities and the impacts of the race and of global warming on them. A lot more needs to be done in this direction. Have you reached out to stakeholders?

--EJustice (talk) 07:35, 10 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback from 5C PZ

  • Please detail who the indigenous peoples are in this region and how they are affected.
   --> Brief background on the Sami and Inuit groups:
       http://www.un.org/en/events/indigenousday/pdf/Indigenous_Arctic_Eng.pdf
       https://www.sametinget.se/sametinget
       http://dx.doi.org/10.1080/13621025.2010.506709
   --> Summarize in greater depth the opposing indigenous views:
       Guardian: https://www.theguardian.com/environment/2011/jul/04/arctic-resources-indigenous-communities
       Sami / Inuit comparison: http://journals.sagepub.com/doi/pdf/10.1177/0967010616665957
       Background research on the many different indigenous people in the Arctic and their connection to their land + how climate change can effect their livelihoods: 
       http://www.arcticcentre.org/EN/communications/arcticregion/Arctic-Indigenous-Peoples
       Arctic Athabaskan Council highlights climate change, economic development and fisheries as important factors to this indigenous region: 
       http://www.arcticathabaskancouncil.com/aac/?q=node/52
  • More resources on Norway:
   On the gas industry: https://www.regjeringen.no/en/topics/energy/oil-and-gas/id1003/
   European energy security: The future of Norwegian natural gas production: http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0301421509005096
  • Other resources:
   General Effects of Climate Change on Arctic Fishes and Fish Populations: https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/17256641

Essay-like

I'm inferring from the other sections on this talk page that this article was written as an educational assignment. Of course this is not inherently a bad thing and they conformed to wikipedia policy regarding style, neutrality, and referencing. However, I think there was also the explicit intention of performing original research ("Have you reached out to stakeholders?") and of connecting ideas not necessarily connected in the literature - this is WP:SYNTHESIS. I think the root of the problem - and the reason it has the 'coatrack' tag - is that many of the sources do not mention the term or the concept 'arctic resource race'. It is a well-structured and comprehensive article, and I'd rather have it fixed by consolidating the connections with relevant literature rather than by moving out content.

Just leaving my assessment here for anyone else who comes along and wants to tackle this 'coatrack' tag; I might get to it eventually. CyreJ (talk) 15:00, 25 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]