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Nominator: EF5 (talk · contribs) 01:21, 4 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Queen of Hearts (talk · contribs) 05:17, 2 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, I will review this. I immediately see the following issues:

• The lead is far too long – this should at most be three paragraphs, not six. For some suggestions on how to shorten this, I think both tornados can be merged into one paragraph, and I think the last paragraph can be merged into the above one.

Three? I've shortened it but it's still four. E_F⁵ 22:45, 5 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• There are several unsourced paragraphs (which User:Phlsph7/HighlightUnreferencedPassages can help highlight)

 Done, re-added and removed some specific company names not mentioned in the ArcGIS source (let me know if you need help navigating through it, it's a bit complicated). E_F⁵ 22:46, 5 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• There are four citation needed tags

 Done, removed the entire table. Per my writing style all deaths need to be cited; the citations were removed as unreliable post-nom. E_F⁵ 22:46, 5 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

While I think I would be within discretion to quickfail this, you are a competent GA writer and most of this wasn't added by you, so I am putting this on hold for now; if you resolve these issues within a reasonable timeframe, I will continue the review. Cheers, charlotte ^👸♥ 05:17, 2 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]